Side-by-Side - Critical Analysis#

1Act as a professional lyric critic and editor. Analyze these lyrics line by line:
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3For each line, provide:
41. **Original Line**: [exact line]
52. **Critique**: Brief analysis of what could be improved (generic language, rhythm issues, weak rhymes, etc.)
63. **Improved Line**: A rewritten version addressing the critique
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8Focus on:
9- Identifying clichés and generic phrases
10- Noting rhythm or syllable inconsistencies
11- Spotting weak or forced rhymes
12- Finding missed opportunities for imagery
13- Maintaining the song's core message
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15Format your response as:
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17Line 1: [Original line]
18Critique: [What needs improvement]
19Improved: [Better version]
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21Line 2: [Original line]
22Critique: [What needs improvement]
23Improved: [Better version]
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25Continue for all lines. After the analysis, provide a brief summary of the main issues and improvements made.
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27[PASTE YOUR LYRICS HERE]

1I'm feeling so sad tonight
2Nothing seems to go right
3I wish you were here with me
4Then I would be happy

1Line 1: I'm feeling so sad tonight
2Critique: Generic emotion statement, lacks imagery
3Improved: Shadows grow longer in my empty room
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5Line 2: Nothing seems to go right
6Critique: Cliché phrase, vague complaint
7Improved: Even coffee tastes like giving up
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9Line 3: I wish you were here with me
10Critique: Overused sentiment, no specific detail
11Improved: Your pillow still holds the shape of goodbye
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13Line 4: Then I would be happy
14Critique: Simplistic conclusion, weak rhyme with "me"
15Improved: But mornings don't wait for what used to be
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17Summary: Main issues were generic emotional statements and clichéd phrases. Improvements add concrete imagery and specific details that show rather than tell the emotions.

1Analyze from a [GENRE] perspective. For example:
2- Country: Look for authentic, down-to-earth imagery
3- Hip-hop: Focus on wordplay and flow
4- Pop: Emphasize catchiness and simplicity

1Concentrate critique on:
2- Syllable counts and rhythm
3- Rhyme scheme effectiveness
4- Alliteration and assonance opportunities

1Analyze how well each line conveys emotion:
2- Does it show or tell?
3- Is the feeling specific or generic?
4- Could imagery be more powerful?